Do you ever wish you could go back in time and be a little kid again? Why yes or why not?

2021-04-27 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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No,I don\'t. because when I was a kid, It was limited about what I could. If I choice when I go back in time exactly, I want to go back to 20. That moment is the happiest time of my entire life. I could drink with my friends every day and I also have high stamina. so even if I didn\'t sleep at all, I can enjoy with my friend until next day. but now if I do like 20, I\'ll be hospitalized.

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Hi [이름]! Once in a while. we think about our childhood days. We remember the days when we were worry free, not that much responsibilities and everything was fun. If I was also given the chance, I would also like to go back just once but only in my 20\'s as well. hahahaha:)

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No,I don\'t. because when I was a kid, It was limited about what I could. 
>> No, I don\'t because when I was a kid, my actions were very limiter. 

If I choice when I go back in time exactly, I want to go back to 20. 
>> If I can choose, I want to go back when I was in my 20s. 

That moment is the happiest time of my entire life. 
>> Those moments are the happiest times of my life. 

I could drink with my friends every day and I also have high stamina. 
>> I could drink with my friends every day and I also had high stamina. 

so even if I didn\'t sleep at all, I can enjoy with my friend until next day. but now if I do like 20, I\'ll be hospitalized.
>> So even if I don\'t sleep at all, I can have a good friends until the next day. Although, if I do those things now, I will be hospitalized. 

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