Do you fear of forced early retirement?
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes, I do.
Few decades ago, people used to work till their retirement ages.
However, after recessions in the recent years, many companies don't provide employees secured retirements.
So many people forced to be retired from their jobs at their 40's or 50's.
People at this ages don't have enough savings to start their own business and also they have kids need to be educated.
And then many of them make similar choice for the rest life.
It becomes more and more competition among them.
Just few of them can succeed.
Without any preparation, early retirement can be fatal for the people.
If you start the preparation after the retirement, it's already late.
Steve jobs told the students at the university Stanford,
"Keep trying to find what you like to do"
I think he wanted to tell us, we need to keep searching what we want to do throughout the whole life and I hope I would do what I like to do after my retirement.
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름],
Good afternoon! Thank you for your thoughts. I think that the time to prepare for retirement is now. We should not procraastinate. Have a great weekend!
-Teacher Faye
Yes, I do.
>>CorrectFew decades ago, people used to work till their retirement ages.
>>CorrectHowever, after recessions in the recent years, many companies don\'t provide employees secured retirements.
>>CorrectSo many people forced to be retired from their jobs at their 40\'s or 50\'s.
>>So, many people are forced to retire from their jobs in their 40\'s and 50\'s.People at this ages don\'t have enough savings to start their own business and also they have kids need to be educated.
>>People at these ages don\'t have enough savings to start their own businesses and they have kids that they need to be educated. And then many of them make similar choice for the rest life. >>Correct
It becomes more and more competition among them. >>It becomes more competetive among them.
Just few of them can succeed. >>Correct
Without any preparation, early retirement can be fatal for the people.
>>CorrectIf you start the preparation after the retirement, it\'s already late.>>CorrectSteve jobs told the students at the University of Stanford, \"Keep trying to find what you like to do\".
>>CorrectI think he wanted to tell us, we need to keep searching what we want to do throughout the whole life and I hope I would do what I like to do after my retirement.
>>Correct
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