Do you feel that the current way we are educating children fully prepares them for the needs of the

2020-02-19 · 첨삭 강사 James

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I think that our current Korean educational system does not offer practical skills related to profession and it is not efficient including of university. In Korea, as we take courses on regular education process of the ministry of education, majority of them have not been reflected the current developing situation. And also, it does not effect on using real daily expression and grammar. Furthermore, theoretical education that not focused on business practice has been dominated at university now. For sure, it is essential to learn about theory for understanding real work environment, but If is there a practice for works, we should learn new things at work. And it leads to waste of time. I hear that the prestigious universities in the world, such as Stanford D.school will offer course for working adults to provide lifelong learning. So, I hope that our country’s system could be changed for demanding of evolving era.

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~Teacher James

I think that our current Korean educational system does not offer practical skills related to profession and it is not efficient including of university. 
>>>  I think that our current Korean educational system does not offer practical skills related to the profession and it is not efficient including university. 
In Korea, as we take courses on regular education process of the ministry of education, majority of them have not been reflected the current developing situation. 
>>> In Korea, as we take courses on the regular education process of the ministry of education, the majority of them have not been reflected the current developing situation. 
And also, it does not effect on using real daily expression and grammar.
>>>  And also, it does not affect using real daily expression and grammar.
Furthermore, theoretical education that not focused on business practice has been dominated at university now. 
>>> CORRECT
For sure, it is essential to learn about theory for understanding real work environment, but If is there a practice for works, we should learn new things at work. 
>>> For sure, it is essential to learn about theory for understanding a real work environment, but If is there a practice for works, we should learn new things at work. 
And it leads to waste of time.
>>> And it leads to a waste of time.
I hear that the prestigious universities in the world, such as Stanford D.school will offer course for working adults to provide lifelong learning. 
>>> I hear that the prestigious universities in the world, such as Stanford D.school will offer a course for working adults to provide lifelong learning. 
So, I hope that our country’s system could be changed for demanding of evolving era.
>>> So, I hope that our country’s system could be changed for demanding of an evolving era.

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