Do you find people smoking in public annoying? Do you think a high tax on cigarettes encourages peop

2014-04-14 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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It definitely annoys me for people to smoke on the street or any other public places.In Korea, most large buildings and public spaces like parks, restaurants, and bus stops are prohibited from smoking. If you smoke in non-smoking places, you will get fined up to 100,000 Korean won.Smoking is harmful not only to smokers but also to other people who smoke indirectly. So, how can we encourage people to quit smoking? Increasing the Tabaco price by levying a higher tax could be one of ways, but how effective it will be could depend on how much the price will increase. If the price is raised marginally, its effect would not be significant because people will get used to paying for the higher price as time goes by. We need comprehensive measures to encourage quitting smoking. Raising insurance premimums is another way. Above all, we need to provide smoking education to people to reinforce the negative impact of this act.A company can offer a monetary reward to employees who quit successfully.

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Good afternoon and happy Monday Sir [이름]! Thank you for sharing your ideas about this topic. I do agree with you. Even if the price of cigarette packs will increase, the people will find ways to look for a cheaper store or they wil get used to it. Education about this is really a must. It should be started at home, school, offices and so on. You did a magnificent job! Keep it up! See you! Teacher Nina   It definitely annoys me for people to smoke on the street or any other public places. >> Did you mean: It definitely annoys me when people smoke on the street or any other public places. In Korea, most large buildings and public spaces like parks, restaurants, and bus stops are prohibited from smoking. >> Correct >> OR: In most large building, public spaces such as parks, restaurants and bus stops in Korea are prohibited from smoking. If you smoke in non-smoking places, you will get fined up to 100,000 Korean won. >> Correct Smoking is harmful not only to smokers but also to other people who smoke indirectly. >> Correct >> OR: Smoking is harmful not only to smokers but also to the other people. >> OR: Smoking is harmful not only to smokers but also to the passive smokers. So, how can we encourage people to quit smoking? >> Correct Increasing the Tabaco price by levying a higher tax could be one of ways, but how effective it will be could depend on how much the price will increase. >> Did you mean: Increasing the Tabaco price by levying a higher tax could be one of the ways, but how effective it will be could depend on how much the price will increase. If the price is raised marginally, its effect would not be significant because people will get used to paying for the higher price as time goes by. >> Correct We need comprehensive measures to encourage quitting smoking. >> Correct >> OR: We need comprehensive measures to encourage people to quit smoking. Raising insurance premimums is another way. >> Correct Above all, we need to provide smoking education to people to reinforce the negative impact of this act. >> Correct A company can offer a monetary reward to employees who quit successfully. >> Correct

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