Do you have a dream job? What is it?

2020-02-19 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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Hi, Beth. Long~ time no see~~ ^^; I had very important thing last Monday. Actullay, I have been to ready to test tube procedure. My son is that case, too. So my Son is very special to me. If I return work in July, I\'ll be very busy and hard. So I hope I have a baby before returing work. Anyway, I answer the question When I was child, I hope becoming a president. ^^;; I was just a simple dream. Well... I have a job that I go to a large company that other envy. But this life have not enough time. Most engineers can\'t have time with their family or to care of their health. I think that a dream job makes them happy for their life. So, I have prepared to other job like counselor. Although, I think that the pay is lower than now. But I hope spending time for my family.

강사 첨삭

Hello Ms. [이름]. Thank you for this. Work and life balance is indeed important. Especially for a married woman with a little kid like you.

- T. Beth

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Hi, Beth. Long~ time no see~~ ^^;

>>>> correct
I had very important thing last Monday.

>>>> I had a very important appointment last Monday.

Actullay, I have been to ready to test tube procedure.

>>>> Actually, I have been preparing for a test tube procedure.

My son is that case, too.

>>>> correct

So my Son is very special to me.

>>>> correct
If I return work in July, I\'ll be very busy and hard.

>>>> If I return to work in July, I\'ll be very busy and hard.

So I hope I have a baby before returing work.
>>>> So I hope I have a baby before returning to work.

Anyway, I answer the question

>>>> Anyway, I will answer the question.

When I was child, I hope becoming a president. ^^;;

>>>> When I was a child, I hoped to become a president.

I was just a simple dream.

>>>> It was just a simple dream.
Well... I have a job that I go to a large company that other envy.

>>>> Well, I have a job in a abig company which others envy.

But this life have not enough time.

>>>> But this job does not give me enough personal time.
Most engineers can\'t have time with their family or to care of their health.

>>>> Most engineers can\'t have time with their family or to care for their health.

I think that a dream job makes them happy for their life.

>>>> I think that a dream job makes them happy in life.

So, I have prepared to other job like counselor.

>>>> So, I have prepared for another job like being a counselor.

Although, I think that the pay is lower than now. But I hope spending time for my family.

>>>> Although, I think that the pay is lower than now, I hope to spend more time for my family.

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