Do you have a favorite item in your collection? What is it, and why?
학생이 쓴 원문
10 years ago, I went to Japan Hokkaido with my siblings in the winter.
we visted a souvenir shop in Otaru city, I bought two mug cups, It\'s made of cristal.
when I drink beer I always use the cup and I really like them.
But it broke one of them by my daughter, I was very sad.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Ju Mi! Those mugs must have been precious to you since they were your favorite. ^^ I wonder what they look like. Anyway, have a great night and see you tomorrow!
~T. Jewel
10 years ago, I went to Japan Hokkaido with my siblings in the winter.
>>Ten years ago, I went to Hokkaido, Japan, with my siblings in the winter.
we visted a souvenir shop in Otaru city,
we visted a souvenir shop in Otaru city,
>>We visited a souvenir shop in Otaru City.
I bought two mug cups,
>>I bought two mugs.
It\'s made of cristal.
>>They are made of crystal.
when I drink beer I always use the cup and I really like them.
when I drink beer I always use the cup and I really like them.
>>When I drink beer, I always use those mugs, and I really like them.
But it broke one of them by my daughter,
>>But one of them was broken by my daughter.
I was very sad.
>>CORRECT
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