Do you have a hobby that you enjoy under the sun?
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Hi Eva,
Thank you for sharing your thoughts on sun exposure. It’s good that you take excellent care of your health by protecting your skin from the harmful effects of UV rays. Your attention to detail, like always applying sunblock and using sun protection, shows how much you value your well-being. You’ve done a great job expressing your thoughts clearly and thoughtfully. Your writing really reflects your careful and caring nature, which is wonderful to see. Keep up the great work, you’re doing an amazing job!
~Teacher Cathy
I don\'t like to stay under the sun.
>>CORRECT
OR>>I don\'t like staying under the sun.
If to stay under the sun, the skin to get a sunburn.
>>If I stay under the sun, I\'ll get sunburned.
When I go outside, I always apply the sunblock at the face and body, wear a hat or use a sun shade.
>>When I go outside, I always apply sunscreen to my face and body, and I wear a hat or use a sunshade.
UVrays make skin disease, also make skin wrinkle.
>>UV rays are the cause of some skin diseases, and it also makes the skin wrinkled.
UVrays make blemish, skin burn and skin cancer. I am afraid to stay under the sun.
>>UV rays cause blemishes, sunburn, and skin cancer. I\'m afraid of staying under the sun.
So l don\'t enjoy activity under the sun.
>>So, I don\'t enjoy doing activities under the sun.
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