Do you have a vision of a better society? What changes would you make? Explain your answer.
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I hope that the death penalty will be allowed for those who commit serious crimes and that the law on juvenile crime will be strong. Because youth punishment is very weak.
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I hope that the death penalty will be allowed for those who commit serious crimes and that the law on juvenile crime will be strong. Because youth punishment is very weak.
>> I hope that they will allow death penalty for those who commit serious crimes and that the law on juvenile crime will be much stronger because youth punishment now is weak.
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