Do you have any exercise or fitness goals that you’d like to achieve one day?

2023-07-05 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

학생이 쓴 원문

There are many reasons why I exercise. I exercise not only to be visually good looking, but also to be healthy and functionally good so that there is no inconvenience in living. And I have goals that I would like to achieve it one day. First, I want to make a nice body like a fitness model and record it in pictures. Next, there is a big triathlon take place in Switzerland or Hawaii, and I want to participate in it. When I was 20, I used to participate in a full-course marathon and a small size of triathlon, but I was busy studying, getting a job, and working, so I put it aside. I want to practice again and participate in a good condition someday.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for this Philip. Good luck with these future goals!

There are many reasons why I exercise.

>>> correct

I exercise not only to be visually good looking, but also to be healthy and functionally good so that there is no inconvenience in living.

>>> correct

And I have goals that I would like to achieve it one day.
>>> Moreover, I have goals that I would like to achieve one day.
First, I want to make a nice body like a fitness model and record it in pictures.
>>> First, I want to have a nice body like that of a fitness model and capture it in pictures.

Next, there is a big triathlon take place in Switzerland or Hawaii, and I want to participate in it.

>>> Next, there is a big triathlon to take place in Switzerland or Hawaii, and I want to participate in it.

When I was 20, I used to participate in a full-course marathon and a small size of triathlon, but I was busy studying, getting a job, and working, so I put it aside.
>>> correct
I want to practice again and participate in a good condition someday.

>>> correct

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기