Do you have any tips for making air travel more enjoyable?

2021-08-31 · 첨삭 강사 Fiona

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Yes, I have. When I have a travel with my family, I usually get my daughter to make a plan for the trip. If so, there are several advantages. First, the travel members are more interested in the travel than when I plan it alone. Second, they actively attend to the travel schedule. Third, they suggest their idea for the travel schedule. So it makes the travel more complete. Fourth, I can save time for travel planning. When my son is a little older, I will have my children plan our family trip together. It\'s my special tip for complete trip.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon Jennifer! 
Thank you for sharing your  tips :) 

Yes, I have.
>>> CORRECT! 
When I have a travel with my family, I usually get my daughter to make a plan for the trip.
>>> When I travel with my family, I usually let my daughter make travel plans.
If so, there are several advantages.
>>> CORRECT! 
First, the travel members are more interested in the travel than when I plan it alone.
>>> First, travelers show more interest than when they plan alone.
Second, they actively attend to the travel schedule.
>>> CORRECT! 
OR: Second, they actively attend the itinerary.
Third, they suggest their idea for the travel schedule.
>>> Third, they suggest their ideas for the travel schedule.
OR: Third, they suggest their idea for the travel schedule.
So it makes the travel more complete.
>>> CORRECT! 
Fourth, I can save time for travel planning.
>>> Fourth, you can save time planning your trip.
When my son is a little older, I will have my children plan our family trip together.
>>> When my son is a little older, I will have my children plan a family trip together.
It\'s my special tip for complete trip.
>>> This is my special tip for a perfect trip.

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