Do you have any tips for making air travel more enjoyable?
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Unfortunately, because I’ve never experienced air travels, I’m going to imagine it and write some tips. I think the most important thing to enjoy air travels is being not afraid. People have to enjoy their feelings (thrill, exciting and so on) while they experience them. If they are afraid of the air travel, they would never enjoy amazing feelings and want to quit it as soon as possible. Therefore, I think being not afraid air travels is one of the tips for people who hope to enjoy them.
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Hi again [이름]!
You could be a great travel buddy then :)
Unfortunately, because I’ve never experienced air travels, I’m going to imagine it and write some tips.
>>> CORRECT!
I think the most important thing to enjoy air travels is being not afraid.
>>> I think the most important thing to enjoy in air travel is not to be afraid.
People have to enjoy their feelings (thrill, exciting and so on) while they experience them.
>>> CORRECT!
If they are afraid of the air travel, they would never enjoy amazing feelings and want to quit it as soon as possible.
>>> If they are afraid of air travel, they will never enjoy the amazing feeling and want to quit it as soon as possible.
Therefore, I think being not afraid air travels is one of the tips for people who hope to enjoy them.
>>> Therefore, I think that not being afraid of air travel is one of the tips for people who want to enjoy it.
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