Do you hobbies that can put you at risk? Why?
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Yes, my hobbies sometimes put me at risk. My hobbies can interrupt to do my priorities as a student or a worker. When I was a high school student, I enthusiastically joined my music band every day, spending a lot of time practicing the instrument I played at home and meeting band members once or twice a week. Even though I enjoyed that time and gained contentment from playing the piano, I sometimes suppose if I spent more time studying instead of joining the band. In this regard, I have been learning how to prioritize between what I have to do and what I like to do. To be specific, I need to organize my schedule and time effectively and efficiently doing something based on its importance.
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Yes, my hobbies sometimes put me at risk. >> CORRECT
My hobbies can interrupt to do my priorities as a student or a worker.
>> My hobbies can interrupt me to do my priorities as a student or a worker.
When I was a high school student, I enthusiastically joined my music band every day, spending a lot of time practicing the instrument I played at home and meeting band members once or twice a week.
>> When I was a high school student, I would enthusiastically join my music band every day, spend a lot of time practicing the instrument I played at home and meet my band members once or twice a week.
Even though I enjoyed that time and gained contentment from playing the piano, I sometimes suppose if I spent more time studying instead of joining the band.
>> CORRECT
In this regard, I have been learning how to prioritize between what I have to do and what I like to do.
>> CORRECT
OR In this regard, I have been learning to enjoy my hobbies, but first things first.
To be specific, I need to organize my schedule and time effectively and efficiently doing something based on its importance.
>> CORRECT
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