Do you know any ways ?
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I guess foreign people don't eat a brown seaweed.
But in my country, it's a so common food.
It's a plant and lives under the sea.
Its color is dark green and brown.
We usually eat like a soup made of it.
It is good for woman after having a baby.
It helps to get her health back.
And then mom cooks it for her baby while the baby gets grown.
So we eat it to celebrate on someone's birthday.
But we never it before a important examination.
It's so slimy. We believe that if we ate this, we would slip off and fail the exam.
It's like a superstiton in Korea.
I heard it's also good for losing a weight.
I can't eat this and a low fish like tasting jelly.
Therefore I should look for another way for my slim shape.
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Hi [이름]!
Thanks for your composition.
-Tiny^0^
I guess foreign people don't eat a brown seaweed.
>> I guess foreign people don't eat brown seaweed.
But in my country, it's a so common food.
>> But in my country, it's a very common food. (better)
It's a plant and lives under the sea.
>>correctIts color is dark green and brown.
>> Its color are dark green and brown.
>>Its color is mix dark greenish and brownish.
We usually eat like a soup made of it.
>>We usually eat soup made out of it.
>>We usually make soup out of it.It is good for woman after having a baby.
>> It is good for a woman after having a baby.
>> It is good for women after having their babies.
It helps to get her health back.
>>correctAnd then mom cooks it for her baby while the baby gets grown.
>> And then the mother(mom) cooks it for her baby while the baby is growing.
So we eat it to celebrate on someone's birthday.>> So we eat it also to celebrate someone's birthday.But we never it before a important examination.
>> But we never eat before an important examination.
It's so slimy.
>>correct
We believe that if we ate this, we would slip off and fail the exam.
>> We believe that if we eat this, we would slip off and fail the exam.
It's like a superstiton in Korea.
>>correct I heard it's also good for losing a weight.
>> I heard it's also good for losing weight.I can't eat this and a low fish like tasting jelly.
>> I can't eat this.
>> (I’m not sure what exactly do you want to say about ...” and a low fish like tasting jelly.”
>> I can't eat raw fish.Therefore I should look for another way for my slim shape.
>> Therefore I should look for another way to have a slim shape.
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