Do you like meeting new people?
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I like meeting new people. There are almost 8 billion people around the world. And each of them has their own merits. If I meet new people, I can learn their merits and socialize by making good terms with new people. In addition, new meeting can give a serendipitous opportunity to me. Their way of living will influence me . So,cooperating with them or sharing some life stories with them makes my life more meaningful.
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I like meeting new people. There are almost 8 billion people around the world. And each of them has their own merits.
>> correct ~~
If I meet new people, I can learn their merits and socialize by making good terms with new people.
>> If I meet new people, I can learn their merits and socialize by being on good terms with them.
In addition, new meeting can give a serendipitous opportunity to me.
>> In addition, new meetings can give me a serendipitous opportunity.
Their way of living will influence me. So, cooperating with them or sharing some life stories with them makes my life more meaningful.
>> correct ~~
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