Do you like taking selfies? Why?

Hi [이름]!

Thanks for answering your writing task. Yes, we should not be afraid to show the real us behind those make up and filters we can put on to make ourselves being admired by others because of how we look. Make up is just a cover up, but personality is the best. Ciao^^

~Teacher Eunice

Just a few days ago, I came across an old disk that has had all of my old pictures in high school.
>>> Just a few days ago, I came across an old disk that contains all of my old pictures in high school. 

I used to take a lot of selfies, so it was full of my selfies and selfies with my friends.
>>> Correct!

>>> I used to take a lot of selfies, so it was full of my pictures with my friends.

That was the time when I started to be interested in looks so much and care about my makeup and hair every day.
>>> That was the time when I started to be so much interested in looks, and care about my makeup and hair every day. 

Of course, it means I cared too much about how other people think of me by my look and worried about when I accidentally expose my ugly moments.
>>> Of course, it means that I cared too much about how other people think of me by my look, and worried about when I accidentally exposed my ugly moments.

However, I don\'t take many selfies anymore.
>>> Correct!

>>> OR: However, I don\'t often take selfies anymore.

It\'s because not only the camera on my phone is poor, but also I don\'t feel the need to brag about the pretty side of me.

>>> Correct!

When this obsession reached the peak, I looked up myself in the mirror every moment to check if everything, the tone of my face and lipstick and mascara, is fine.
>>> When this obsession reached the peak, I looked up myself in the mirror every moment to check if the tone of my face, lipstick and mascara, were fine.

Now I don\'t need to look so perfectly every single moment.
>>> Correct! 

Also, now I know although I try my best, some people don\'t care about it at all or some don\'t think I am pretty, which in anyways don\'t matter at all!

>>> Correct!