Do you like your neighborhood?
학생이 쓴 원문
I like my neighborhood because it\'s quiet and calm. I lived in Seoul 7 years ago for 3 years, and there are so many people. The rent was also expensive comparing to this area. Seoul has a lot of advantages, for example, facilities and cultural places are near to where I lived. I enjoyed hanging out with friends, so Seoul was a perfect place to live back then. Plus, I could easily get a job when I was looking for a job. However, it was competitive and people are always busy. I became seeking for peaceful and not busy place. I am living in Hwaseong which is residential area and I am satisfied with it. The bad thing about it is I need to drive a car to go to mart or department store, but I can handle it.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Ms. [Name]. That\'s awesome! Living in a good neighborhood makes a significant difference in our daily lives and overall well-being.
-T. Sonny
I like my neighborhood because it\'s quiet and calm.>>Correct!
I lived in Seoul 7 years ago for 3 years, and there are so many people.
>>Seven years ago, I spent three years living in Seoul, which is known for its large population.
The rent was also expensive comparing to this area.
>>The rent was also more expensive compared to this area.
Seoul has a lot of advantages, for example, facilities and cultural places are near to where I lived.
>>Seoul has a lot of advantages, for example, facilities and cultural places are near to where I used to live.
I enjoyed hanging out with friends, so Seoul was a perfect place to live back then.
>>Correct!
Plus, I could easily get a job when I was looking for a job.
>>Moreover, it was easy to find a job when I was searching for one.
However, it was competitive and people are always busy.
>>However, it was a highly competitive environment, and everyone was always on the go.
I became seeking for peaceful and not busy place.
>>I started seeking a more peaceful and less hectic environment.
I am living in Hwaseong which is residential area and I am satisfied with it.
>>I am living in Hwaseong, which is a residential area and I am satisfied with it.
The bad thing about it is I need to drive a car to go to mart or department store, but I can handle it.
>>Correct!
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The downside is that I have to drive to get to the mart or department store, but it’s manageable.
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