Do you play any sports?

2019-10-23 · 첨삭 강사 James

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When I was young, I used to play soccer. I liked the sports which is used a ball. However, I don\'t have enough time and physical strength. These days, I try to work out in the jym and to manage my healthy. By the way, nowadays, E-sports is also famous sports in Korea and some countries. I am interested in some games which is competited or shooting through guns. I wish to join the contest. hahahahaha

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름],
Thank you for submitting your homework. 

Online games are very popular nowadays. 

When I was young, I used to play soccer.

>>> CORRECT

I liked the sports which is used a ball.

>>> I liked the sports which use a ball.

However, I don\'t have enough time and physical strength.

>>> CORRECT

These days, I try to work out in the jym and to manage my healthy. 

>>> These days, I try to work out in the gym and to manage my health. 

By the way, nowadays, E-sports is also famous sports in Korea and some countries.

>>> By the way, nowadays, E-sports are also famous sports in Korea and some countries.

I am interested in some games which is competited or shooting through guns. I wish to join the contest. hahahahaha

>>> I am interested in some games which is competitive or shooting through guns. I wish to join the contest. Bahahaha.


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