do you remember what I told you?

Hi [이름]!

Thank you for sharing this story.^^

I really admire you for sharing even personal matters like this.

You are getting used in learning English.^^

Please go over the corrections.

Have a great night!

Teacher Nina

Hi teacher!

>> Correct!
Long time no see~~

>> Correct!
The topic of today is \"the effect of having pets on you\"

>> The topic for today is about the effect of having pets.
um..
do you remember what I told you? 

>> Correct!
Carolyn breed the dog called \"Cheese\"

>> Carolyn breeds a dog called \"Cheese\".
She really like it(her).

>> She really likes it.

She took it from shop from 1 years ago because of absence of her roomate.

>> She took it from a shop one year ago because of the absence of her roommate.

>> OR: She got it from a shop one year ago because her roommate is always not around.

Her roomate really like to go out and enjoy her time.

>> Her roommate really likes to go out and enjoy her time.
So, Carolyn felt loney.

>> So Carolyn felt lonely.

She really happy about raising Cheese.

>> She is really happy about raising Cheese.
Cheese always welcomed her whenever carolyn felt sad or happy.

>> Correct!

in these days Cheese is in another city because of the rule of apartment.

>> These days, Cheese is in another city because of the rule of the apartment.
She really miss Cheese.

>> She really misses Cheese.

As far I saw, It is very helpful to have a pet

>> As far I saw, it is very helpful to have a pet.