Do you still believe in traditional medicines? Why or why not?

2022-06-21 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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well we already talked about this. yeah I don\'t believe in traditional medicine and treatment. I believe in science. so I much prefer to go to hospital rather than oriental medicine. in the hospital there are acceptable methods to find out an illness and some problems. such as using very developed machines. in the oriental treatment they just look on the surface and rely on patient\'s description. how can I give my body to them? they are just using stacked data by the people rather than using a machines, technology, science.

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Hi [이름]!  

I totally agree with you. The generation now is more advanced so we should rely on it. 

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well we already talked about this. 
>> Well, we\'ve already talked about this. 

yeah I don\'t believe in traditional medicine and treatment. 
>> I don\'t believe in traditional medicine and treatment. 

I believe in science. so I much prefer to go to hospital rather than oriental medicine.
>>I believe in science  so I prefer to go to a hospital than an oriental doctor. 

in the hospital there are acceptable methods to find out an illness and some problems. 
>> In a hospital, there are acceptable methods to find diagnose illnesses such as using developed machines. 

such as using very developed machines.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

 in the oriental treatment they just look on the surface and rely on patient\'s description. 
>> When you use oriental treatments, they just look on the surface and rely on the patient\'s description of the symptoms

how can I give my body to them? 
>> How can I trust my body to them. 

they are just using stacked data by the people rather than using a machines, technology, science.
>> T
hey are just using stacked data by our ancestors instead of using machines, technology and Science. 

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