Do you think a tax break is the best way to attract tourists, or should the focus be on marketing Ko
학생이 쓴 원문
Financial benefit can attract tourists to choose Korea to get plastic surgery and dermatological treatment. However, there are two concerns. First, tax breaks will decrease government reserves. Most importantly it might lead to a chicken game where tourists are no longer satisfied with tax breaks and demand for a reduction of prices. Since there are various hospitals that provide similar services, the competition will hurt the business. Accordingly, I believe it is time to focus more on quality of Korean medical service. According to the research, Korea is adopting new medical technology quickly. The famous ulthearphy is developed by foreign company called Merz Aesthetics but quickly adopted in the industries after Korean doctors adopted it. On top of that, K-pop and K-drama can bring advantages to advertise the quality of medical service. This is because many foreigners believe that they can receive a treatment like their favorite actress/actor if they receive treatment in Korea.
강사 첨삭
Thank you for this, Aciel!
Financial benefit can attract tourists to choose Korea to get plastic surgery and dermatological treatment.
>>> OR: Financial benefits can attract tourists to choose Korea for plastic surgery and dermatological treatments.
However, there are two concerns.
>>> correct
First, tax breaks will decrease government reserves.
>>> correct
>>> OR: First, tax breaks may reduce government reserves.
Most importantly it might lead to a chicken game where tourists are no longer satisfied with tax breaks and demand for a reduction of prices.
>>> OR: More importantly, they could lead to a “chicken game,” in which tourists are no longer satisfied with tax breaks and instead demand lower prices.
Since there are various hospitals that provide similar services, the competition will hurt the business.
>>> correct
>>> OR: Since many hospitals provide similar services, increased competition could hurt the industry.
Accordingly, I believe it is time to focus more on quality of Korean medical service.
>>> correct
>>> OR: Therefore, I believe it is time to focus more on the quality of Korean medical services.
According to the research, Korea is adopting new medical technology quickly.
>>> According to research, Korea adopts new medical technologies quickly.
The famous ulthearphy is developed by foreign company called Merz Aesthetics but quickly adopted in the industries after Korean doctors adopted it.
>>> OR: For example, the well-known Ultherapy was developed by a foreign company called Merz Aesthetics, but it was rapidly adopted after Korean doctors began using it.
On top of that, K-pop and K-drama can bring advantages to advertise the quality of medical service.
>>> correct
>>> OR: In addition, K-pop and K-dramas offer advantages in promoting the quality of medical services.
This is because many foreigners believe that they can receive a treatment like their favorite actress/actor if they receive treatment in Korea.
>>> correct
>>> OR: This is because many foreigners believe they can receive treatments similar to those of their favorite actors or actresses by coming to Korea.
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