Do you think alternative medicines work better than modern drugs?

2015-01-26 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

학생이 쓴 원문

I have two opinions on the statement that alternative medicines work better than modern drugs. One opinion is that alternative drugs can work better than modern ones. Many new medicines has been invented and it will also have been made all over the world. And their ability to cure a certain disease will have improved due to the development of technology. So, it is possible to treat a disease that we have not cured in the future. In other words, alternative medicines work better than now. On the other hand, the other one is that future medicines will not work better than modern drugs. Since people have already invented and used medicine, the virus that can cause a disease has been adapted for these medicines, and it is getting stronger. Moreover, it is possible to be occurrence of new diseases in the future. Thus, alternative drugs will not be able to be perfectly useful. In that respects, I cannot say that alternative medicines absolutely work better than modern drugs.

강사 첨삭

Good morning Miss [이름]! Thank you for sharing your ideas regarding our topic. I hope that through the development of technology, we can discover a cure to deadly diseases like cancer and AIDS. Anyway, we should always take care of our health. Have a great day! ~Kelly^^ I have two opinions on the statement that alternative medicines work better than modern drugs. >> Correct.One opinion is that alternative drugs can work better than modern ones. >> My first opinion is that alternative drugs can work better than modern ones. Many new medicines has been invented and it will also have been made all over the world. >> Many new medicines have been invented and made all over the world. And their ability to cure a certain disease will have improved due to the development of technology. >> And their ability to cure a certain disease have been improved due to the development of technology. So, it is possible to treat a disease that we have not cured in the future. >> So, it is now possible to treat a disease that were not cured in the past. In other words, alternative medicines work better than now. >> Correct.On the other hand, the other one is that future medicines will not work better than modern drugs. >> On the other hand, future medicine discoveries will not work better than modern drugs. Since people have already invented and used medicine, the virus that can cause a disease has been adapted for these medicines, and it is getting stronger. >> Since people have already invented and used medicines, the virus that can cause a disease have adapted to these medicines, and are getting stronger. Moreover, it is possible to be occurrence of new diseases in the future. >> Moreover, it is possible that new diseases will emerge in the future. Thus, alternative drugs will not be able to be perfectly useful.>> Correct. In that respects, I cannot say that alternative medicines absolutely work better than modern drugs. >> In that respect, I cannot say that alternative medicines absolutely work better than modern drugs.  

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