Do you think anyone can start their own business? Why or why not?
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I think that anyone can start their own business but before anyone start the business, they should think about couple of things. First, you should have capital strength. Some business doesn\'t goes well from start so you have to have enough money to keep the business and can try to make it better. So, It takes time and time means money. Second, you should have service mind. When I say service mind means same as business mind. I think anyone who want to start their own business, most important thing is their attitude towards to business activities.
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I think that anyone can start their own business but before anyone start the business, they should think about couple of things.
>>>I think anyone can start their own business, but before anyone can start a business, they should think about a couple of things.
First, you should have capital strength.
>>>First, you should have a capital strength.
Some business doesn\'t goes well from start so you have to have enough money to keep the business and can try to make it better.
>>>Some businesses don\'t go well from the start so, you have to have enough money to keep the business and try to make it better.
So, It takes time and time means money.
>>>So, it takes time and time means money.
Second, you should have service mind.
>>>Second, you should have a service mind.
When I say service mind means same as business mind.
>>>When I say service mind, it means the same as business mind.
I think anyone who want to start their own business, most important thing is their attitude
>>>I think anyone who wants to start their own business, the most important thing is their attitude towards the business activities.
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