Do you think Arts have something to do with one\'s behavior?
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I think that Arts express one\'s emotion. There is various methods to care people\'s mind. Expressive arts therapy uses arts like movements, drawing, painting, wrings, sound, It is process of discovering ourselves from inner emotion. Peoples use the arts to let go, to express, to release.
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I think that Arts express one\'s emotion.
>> CORRECT!
There is various methods to care people\'s mind.
>> There are various methods to care people\'s mind.
Expressive arts therapy uses arts like movements, drawing, painting, wrings, sound,
>>Expressive arts therapy uses arts like movements, drawings, paintings, wrings, and sounds.
It is process of discovering ourselves from inner emotion.
>> It is a process of discovering ourselves from inner emotion.
Peoples use the arts to let go, to express, to release.
>> People use the arts to let go, to express, and to release.
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