Do you think birthdays are important? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
In my opinion, birthdays are important.
Because in a birthday, there is many meanings about a birth.
And also a lot of people are thinking that birthdays are important to them.
And I am one of the people so I also think that birthdays are important.
Also celebrating a birthday is one of the ways to remeber our parents.
Thanks for our parents, we are existing in this world.
That\'s why celebreating a birthday can be one of the ways to remeber our parents.
So I think all the birthdays are important to everyone.
강사 첨삭
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Birthdays are great. It\'s a day meant to celebrate your existence in this world.
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In my opinion, birthdays are important.
Because in a birthday, there is many meanings about a birth.
And also a lot of people are thinking that birthdays are important to them.
And I am one of the people so I also think that birthdays are important.
Also celebrating a birthday is one of the ways to remeber our parents.
Thanks for our parents, we are existing in this world.
That\'s why celebreating a birthday can be one of the ways to remeber our parents.
So I think all the birthdays are important to everyone.
>> CORRECT
Because in a birthday, there is many meanings about a birth.
>> There are many traditional things to do during a person\'s birthday.
And also a lot of people are thinking that birthdays are important to them.
>> Also, a lot of people are thinking that birthdays are important to them..
And I am one of the people so I also think that birthdays are important.
>> I am one of those people.
Also celebrating a birthday is one of the ways to remeber our parents.
>> This is also another way for us to remember our parents.
Thanks for our parents, we are existing in this world.
>> We should thank them because they are the reason why we exist in this world.
That\'s why celebreating a birthday can be one of the ways to remeber our parents.
>> This is the reason why we can appreciate them more.
So I think all the birthdays are important to everyone.
>> So, I think all the birthdays are important to everyone.
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