Do you think bullying should be made a crime or is it part of growing up? Why or why not?

2020-06-12 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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I think bullying should be made a crime. It can\'t say part of growing up. Because people who bullying by another people feel afraid about their bullying. It is not joke. Even if bullying people think it\'s a joke, people who bullying by them regards it\'s terrible. So, i think if the bullying makes them hurt, it is never part of growing uo. It is obviously crime. We must understand victim\'s mind well.

강사 첨삭

Hi, So [이름]. ^^ 

That\'s true! 
Bullying can actually cause trauma to other people. 
So yes, I agree that it should be considered a crime. 


~t. Ally


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I think bullying should be made a crime. 
>> CORRECT!

It can\'t say part of growing up.
>> It can\'t just be part of growing up.

Because people who bullying by another people feel afraid about their bullying. 
>> Because people who get bullied by other people feel afraid of their bullies.

It is not joke. 
>> It\'s not a joke.

Even if bullying people think it\'s a joke, people who bullying by them regards it\'s terrible.
>> Even if bullies think it\'s a joke, people who get bullied by them regard it as a terrible experience.

So, i think if the bullying makes them hurt, it is never part of growing uo. 
>> So, I think if the bully hurts them, it is never part of growing up.

It is obviously crime.
>> It is obviously a crime.

We must understand victim\'s mind well.
>> We must understand the victim\'s mind well.

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