Do you think bullying should be made a crime or is it part of growing up?
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Do you think bullying should be made a crime or is it part of growing up?
I don\'t think that bullying is not part of growing up, it is a crime.
For example, Some sport stars and enterainer were bullying at a school.
They have terminated their activity. Theseday, bullying is becoming a serious issue on our country.
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Hi [이름]! I feel the same way. Victims of bullying get hurt no only physically but mentally as well. They should put a stop to this.
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For example, Some sport stars and enterainer were bullying at a school.
They have terminated their activity.
I don\'t think that bullying is not part of growing up, it is a crime.
>> I don\'t think that bullying is a part of growing up, it is a crime.
For example, Some sport stars and enterainer were bullying at a school.
For example, some sport stars and entertainers get bullied when they were still studying.
They have terminated their activity.
>> This causes them to terminate their activities.
Theseday, bullying is becoming a serious issue on our country.
>> These days, bullying had become a very serious in our country.
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