Do you think bullying should be made a crime or is it part of growing up?
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I think bullying is absolutely crime. Some children use their strength to bully the weak children. They bully someone just for the fun, It\'s an indelible wound to someone who gets hurt. In Korea, many famous people are now rumored to committed to school violence. I think school violence should be a crime, So Victims of school violence will disappear.
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Hi Steve! I feel the same way. Victims of bullying get hurt no only physically but mentally as well. They should put a stop to this.
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I think bullying is absolutely crime.
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Some children use their strength to bully the weak children.
>> CORRECT
They bully someone just for the fun, It\'s an indelible wound to someone who gets hurt.
>> They bully other people just for fun. It\'s causes deep wounds physically and mentally to the victim.
In Korea, many famous people are now rumored to committed to school violence.
>> In Korea, many famous people are rumored to do violence in school.
I think school violence should be a crime, So Victims of school violence will disappear.
>> I think bullying should be a crime so that violence in school would be put into an end.
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