Do you think bullying should be made a crime or is it part of growing up?
학생이 쓴 원문
This issue is very sensitive in korea. In the past, Bullying of students had existed but sociaty didn\'t care of it. So many students think it\'s just part of growing up. But nowadays, There are a lot of issue about Bullying, such as sports, famous celebrites.
The first start happened in sports. The twins volleyball stars bullied their classmate when they were students. They are punished by volleyball institute. After that, The fact that The famous celebrites did the same thing which twins did revealed by their classmate. They retired all of sudden. I think Bullying should be made a crime and the sociaty is doing now.
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Hi [이름]! I feel the same way. Victims of bullying get hurt no only physically but mentally as well. They should put a stop to this.
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The first start happened in sports.
This issue is very sensitive in korea.
>>This issue is very sensitive in Korea.
In the past, Bullying of students had existed but sociaty didn\'t care of it.
>> In the past, bullying was prominent and the society didn\'t really cared about it.
So many students think it\'s just part of growing up.
>> CORRECT
But nowadays, There are a lot of issue about Bullying, such as sports, famous celebrites.
>> But nowadays, there are a lot of issue about bullying in sports and famous celebrities.
The first start happened in sports.
>> This happened first in sports.
The twins volleyball stars bullied their classmate when they were students.
>> The twin volleyball stars bullied one of their classmates.
They are punished by volleyball institute.
>> They were punished by the volleyball institute.
After that, The fact that The famous celebrites did the same thing which twins did revealed by their classmate.
>> After that, other famous celebrities also bullied their classmate.
They retired all of sudden.
>> They were kicked out all of a sudden.
I think Bullying should be made a crime and the sociaty is doing now.
>> I think bullying should be made a crime.
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