Do you think change is important? why?
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I think whether like change is a personal prefernece. some people would more like a stable life without much changes, while the others like more challenging life with new experiences.
I am a person who like changes. Especially from the work, if I work for same work for long time, I easily feel tired from routine work.
Moreover, I wish I could develop everyday. I wish today is better than yesterday, and my ability is same. For these reason, I tried to learn something special such as tennis and chinses chess \"go\".
Even if I like changes in general, there are still many things I wish not to change. for example my family. I sometimes feel afraid to see my parents getting older, and it makes me dislike changes. And also my children since they are so small and lovely that I wish I could enjoy little more.
No matter what I like, time always flies. and the only thing I can do is seize the day.
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I think whether like change is a personal prefernece.
>>>I think change is a personal preference.
some people would more like a stable life without much changes, while the others like more challenging life with new experiences.
>>>Some people would like a more stable life without much changes, while others like more challenging life with new experiences.
I am a person who like changes. Especially from the work,
>>>I am a person who like changes especially from the work.
if I work for same work for long time, I easily feel tired from routine work.
>>>If I work in the same work for a long time, I easily feel tired.
Moreover, I wish I could develop everyday.
>>>Moreover, I wish I could develop every day.
I wish today is better than yesterday, and my ability is same.
>>>I wish today is better than yesterday and my ability stays the same.
For these reason, I tried to learn something special such as tennis and chinses chess \"go\".
>>>For these reasons, I tried to learn something special such as tennis and Chinese chess \"Go\".
for example my family.
>>>For example, my family.
I sometimes feel afraid to see my parents getting older, and it makes me dislike changes.
>>>I sometimes feel afraid to see my parents getting older and it makes me dislike that change.
And also my children since they are so small and lovely that I wish I could enjoy little more.
>>>Also, for my children since they are still young and lovely, I wish I could enjoy a little bit more.
No matter what I like, time always flies. and the only thing I can do is seize the day.
>>>No matter what I like, time always flies and the only thing I can do is to seize the day.
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