Do you think children are becoming more dangerous and violent these days? What advice would you give

2016-08-18 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Even in ancient times, old generation used to accuse children of being spoiled, discourteous, and ill-behaved. They might have thought that young kids in those times became more dangerous and violent. Even today, as I’m getting old, I myself think that I didn’t behave like kids these days when I was a kid. I was more polite and respected the elderly. A few days ago, I was riding a bicycle on the narrow road and I didn’t steer well, so ended up lightly hitting a teenage girl’s right hand who was walking ahead of me with her few friends. She turned around and gave me an icy look while ripping out bad words like “shit”. I have never ever expected such bad words out of teenager’s mouth. It seems to be true that young children are becoming more dangerous and violent these days from our old generation’s stand point. However, looking at history, this could be just natural things that can occur like our behavior when we were young was also worrisome to our parents’ generation.

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Happy Thursday Sir [이름]! Did you have a great vacation? I hope that you did. Thank you so much for spending some time to send me your composition. Well said, Sir [이름]! Kids nowadays are different.They usually utter bad words or even do bad deeds. Let us hope that it won\'t worsen.See you in class. Teacher Nina   Even in ancient times, old generation used to accuse children of being spoiled, discourteous, and ill-behaved. >> correct They might have thought that young kids in those times became more dangerous and violent. >> correct Even today, as I’m getting old, I myself think that I didn’t behave like kids these days when I was a kid. >> correct I was more polite and respected the elderly. >> correct A few days ago, I was riding a bicycle on the narrow road and I didn’t steer well, so ended up lightly hitting a teenage girl’s right hand who was walking ahead of me with her few friends. >> correct She turned around and gave me an icy look while ripping out bad words like “shit”. >> correct I have never ever expected such bad words out of teenager’s mouth. >> I have never ever expected such bad words out of the teenager’s mouth. It seems to be true that young children are becoming more dangerous and violent these days from our old generation’s stand point. >> correct However, looking at history, this could be just natural things that can occur like our behavior when we were young was also worrisome to our parents’ generation. >> correct

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