Do you think children today are under more pressure? Why or why not?
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I think that children today are under more pressure.
Nowadays, a lot of parents want their children to have a safe and professional job.
But if we want to have it, then we need some skills and basic ideas that we can get by studying.
Because of this, a lot of parents make their children study more hard than before.
Because of this reason, I think children nowadays are under more pressure.
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>>CORRECT!
Nowadays, a lot of parents want their children to have a safe and professional job.
Nowadays, a lot of parents want their children to have a safe and professional job.
>>CORRECT!
But if we want to have it, then we need some skills and basic ideas that we can get by studying.
But if we want to have it, then we need some skills and basic ideas that we can get by studying.
>>CORRECT!
Because of this, a lot of parents make their children study more hard than before.
Because of this, a lot of parents make their children study more hard than before.
>>Because of this, a lot of parents make their children study harder than before.
Because of this reason, I think children nowadays are under more pressure.
Because of this reason, I think children nowadays are under more pressure.
>>CORRECT!
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