Do you think children today eat too much fast food and don\'t play enough sports?
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes, I do. When I was young, we are playing outside everyday. Because all most parents have a phone but we don\'t. And the computer games aren\'t intersted. But nowdays, all children are exposed to indoor activity, like computergames, mobile phone, SNS, mobile games etc. So they aren\'t play enough sports. And all most parents are so busy for work. Naturally, children are exposed fastfood.
강사 첨삭
Hello Chris!
Thank you for doing your homework again!
I hope you enjoy your night!
Good night!
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>>CORRECT
When I was young, we are playing outside everyday.
>>When I was young, we used to play outside every day.
Because all most parents have a phone but we don\'t.
>>Most parents have a phone but we didn\'t.
And the computer games aren\'t intersted.
>>The computer games weren\'t interesting.
But nowdays, all children are exposed to indoor activity, like computergames, mobile phone, SNS, mobile games etc.
>>But nowadays, children are exposed to indoor activities such as computer games, mobile phones and mobile games.
So they aren\'t play enough sports.
>>They don\'t play enough sports.
And all most parents are so busy for work.
>>Most parents are also busy working.
Naturally, children are exposed fastfood.
>>In addition, children are also exposed to a lot of fast food.
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