Do you think city governments should discourage use of privately driven cars within city limits?

2014-10-16 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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In big cities, traffic congestion is becoming a major problem due to the increased number of vehicles with the limited number of roads. Many governments has been implementing various measures to reduce the number of vehicles on the roads. For instance, Singapore is regulating the car parc by restricting the quota that the number of rights to purchase a vehicle. Shanghai also adopts a similar scheme to control the car parc. So the rights to purchase a vehicle is too expensive in Singapore. Seoul also has been introducing a lot of programs to encourage its citizens to use the public transportation rather than driving a private car: setting up passenger sheds, constructing separate lanes for buses, reducing import tax on city-based buses, increasing export tax on private cars, collecting tolls to park cars on the streets, reducing issuance of licenses to private cars and arranging facilities of public transport instead of private cars in education institutes and offices.

강사 첨삭

I love your essay today, Sir [이름]!Thanks for sharing a lot of ideas about the topic. There are really a lot of cars these days. I prefer to use the public transportation because it is cheaper. Actually, I think it is more practical not to have a car in my country. It\'s nice to hear that there are a lot of programs in Seoul. Do you think traffic congestion will be solved in the future because of these programs? Talk to you soon. Teacher Nina   In big cities, traffic congestion is becoming a major problem due to the increased number of vehicles with the limited number of roads. >> CORRECT >> OR: In big cities, traffic congestion is becoming a major problem due to the increasing number of vehicles with limited number of roads. Many governments has been implementing various measures to reduce the number of vehicles on the roads. >> CORRECT For instance, Singapore is regulating the car parc by restricting the quota that the number of rights to purchase a vehicle. >> Did you mean: For instance, Singapore is regulating the car parc by restricting the quota of the number of rights to purchase a vehicle. Shanghai also adopts a similar scheme to control the car parc. >> CORRECT So the rights to purchase a vehicle is too expensive in Singapore. >> CORRECT Seoul also has been introducing a lot of programs to encourage its citizens to use the public transportation rather than driving a private car: setting up passenger sheds, constructing separate lanes for buses, reducing import tax on city-based buses, increasing export tax on private cars, collecting tolls to park cars on the streets, reducing issuance of licenses to private cars and arranging facilities of public transport instead of private cars in education institutes and offices. >> CORRECT >> OR: Seoul also has been introducing a lot of programs to encourage its citizens to use the public transportation rather than driving a private car. And also setting up passenger sheds, constructing separate lanes for buses, reducing import tax on city-based buses, increasing export tax on private cars, collecting tolls to park cars on the streets, reducing issuance of licenses to private cars and arranging facilities of public transport instead of private cars in education institutes and offices.

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