Do you think collecting something is a good hobby?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think the collecting something is a good hobby.
It can concentrate something and enjoy our heart.
And It can need to remove other thought.
Of course, It should need a little money.
If I have a big house, I want to collect a record (vinyl).
I like listening to many kind of music. Among them, I liked \"Evanescence\".
So, I copied Evanescence\'s song and I sang at the concert when I joined the band 5 years ago.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]. Thank you for this. Wow! Evanescence? She has a very high pitched voice. You must be an awesome singer to be able to sing her songs. That\'s great!
- T. Beth
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I think the collecting something is a good hobby.>>> I think collecting something is a good hobby.
It can concentrate something and enjoy our heart.
>>> OR: You can concentrate on something and enjoy it with full heart.
And It can need to remove other thought.
>>> And it can help you get your mind off other things.
Of course, It should need a little money.
>>> Of course, it would require spending a bit of money.
Of course, It should need a little money.
>>> Of course, it would require spending a bit of money.
If I have a big house, I want to collect a record (vinyl).
>>> correct
I like listening to many kind of music.
I like listening to many kind of music.
>>> I like listening to many kinds of music.
Among them, I liked \"Evanescence\".
>>> correct
So, I copied Evanescence\'s song and I sang at the concert when I joined the band 5 years ago.
So, I copied Evanescence\'s song and I sang at the concert when I joined the band 5 years ago.
>>> correct
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