Do you think collecting something is a good hobby?

2020-04-27 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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I think the collecting something is a good hobby. It can concentrate something and enjoy our heart. And It can need to remove other thought. Of course, It should need a little money. If I have a big house, I want to collect a record (vinyl). I like listening to many kind of music. Among them, I liked \"Evanescence\". So, I copied Evanescence\'s song and I sang at the concert when I joined the band 5 years ago.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]. Thank you for this. Wow! Evanescence? She has a very high pitched voice. You must be an awesome singer to be able to sing her songs. That\'s great!
- T. Beth
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I think the collecting something is a good hobby.
>>> I think collecting something is a good hobby.  
It can concentrate something and enjoy our heart.
>>>  OR: You can concentrate on something and enjoy it with full heart. 
And It can need to remove other thought.
>>> And it can help you get your mind off other things.  
Of course, It should need a little money.
>>> Of course, it would require spending a bit of money.  
If I have a big house, I want to collect a record (vinyl).
>>> correct  
I like listening to many kind of music. 
>>> I like listening to many kinds of music.   
Among them, I liked \"Evanescence\".
>>> correct  
So, I copied Evanescence\'s song and I sang at the concert when I joined the band 5 years ago.
>>> correct  

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