Do you think companies should provide childcare facilities for working mothers?
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Many companies provide welfare to their worker for increasing productivity.
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>>Many companies provide welfare to their workers for increasing productivity.
As it is increased the number of people have highly educated, many highly educated worker want not only money but also welfare.
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To get talented worker, companies make an effort to be ‘more good company’.
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>>Companies make an effort to be ‘more good company’ to get talented workers.
However, it is not a duty, just option.
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Companies don’t have the duty to provide all welfare.
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It is the same about providing childcare facility for working mothers.
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Although it is not a duty, if companies provide the childcare facility for working mothers, companies will be receive more benefits.
>>Although it is not a duty, if companies provide the childcare facility for working mothers, companies will receive more benefits.
First, they don’t need to lose their talented workers.
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>>Primarily, they must not lost their talented workers.
Many working mothers conflicted their career and family.
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Some people give up their career.
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>>Some parents give up their careers.
So, childcare facility can be prevent this.
>> So, childcare facility can prevent this.
Also, Companies should hire new worker instead of her, and it spend money, time and labor force.
>> Also, companies should hire new workers instead of her, and it spends money, time and labor force.
They can save unexpected spending through welfare.
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>>They can save unexpected spending through welfares.
Thus, although it is not a duty, it is surely necessary.
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