Do you think corruption will always be a part of business and politics?

2016-01-29 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I definitely don’t think that corruption is a part of business and politics. Due to the prevalence and repeated failure of eradication of corruption in our society, we all reached the point to give up our hope for transparent and corruption free society. Whenever we have elections for president or lawmakers, we are being wooed by politicians with promises of corruption free government and harsh crack-down on corruption. When they seize the power, they purge the people of the previous government in the name of making the clean government. However, not long after they took office, many governments become being involved in the similar corruption scandals. This phenomenon happens and repeats all the time, which makes us feel frustrated and not to foster a hope. I sometimes think that the politicians educate the public in that way not to expect a clean society and to make us think that corruption is inevitable. Indeed, we became so pessimistic about having corruption free society.

강사 첨삭

Hello there Sir [이름]!
Thank you very much for your composition.

Corruption is the main problem in my country.

Even government officials who are innocent are accused of doing it.

I appreciate that you explained your ideas in a great way.

Anyway, have a great night and weekend ahead of you.

Teacher Nina


I definitely don’t think that corruption is a part of business and politics.

>> CORRECT

Due to the prevalence and repeated failure of eradication of corruption in our society, we all reached the point to give up our hope for transparent and corruption free society.

>> CORRECT

Whenever we have elections for president or lawmakers, we are being wooed by politicians with promises of corruption free government and harsh crack-down on corruption.

>> CORRECT

When they seize the power, they purge the people of the previous government in the name of making the clean government.

>> CORRECT

However, not long after they took office, many governments become being involved in the similar corruption scandals.

>> CORRECT

This phenomenon happens and repeats all the time, which makes us feel frustrated and not to foster a hope.

>> CORRECT

I sometimes think that the politicians educate the public in that way not to expect a clean society and to make us think that corruption is inevitable.

>> CORRECT

Indeed, we became so pessimistic about having corruption free society.

>> CORRECT

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