Do you think electricity is the greatest invention ever?
학생이 쓴 원문
How many inventions are there ever?
I searched for them online.
There are so many them over the world,
Some of them, fire, money, wagon wheel, are the great inventions in modern civilization,
However,personally,electricity is the greatest invention in the convenience of modern civilization.
I don\'t want to imagine my life without electricity.
I make sure ,it also led to the modern industrial development of civilization.
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How many inventions are there ever?
>> Correct
I searched for them online.
I searched for them online.
>> Correct
There are so many them over the world,
There are so many them over the world,
>> There are so many of them all over the world.
Some of them, fire, money, wagon wheel, are the great inventions in modern civilization,
Some of them, fire, money, wagon wheel, are the great inventions in modern civilization,
>> Some of them like fire, money and wagon wheel are great inventions in modern civilization.
However,personally,electricity is the greatest invention in the convenience of modern civilization.
However,personally,electricity is the greatest invention in the convenience of modern civilization.
>> However, personally, electricity is the greatest invention that contributed to the convenience of modern civilization.
I don\'t want to imagine my life without electricity.
I don\'t want to imagine my life without electricity.
>> Correct
I make sure ,it also led to the modern industrial development of civilization.
I make sure ,it also led to the modern industrial development of civilization.
>> I am also sure that it led to the modern industrial development of civilization.
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