Do you think everyone should learn to create art? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
I don\'t think everyone should learn to create art. Learning art gave us basic ability to create art work. However, it make us lock up in fixed rules and distribute showing creativity. Therefore, if someone want to be artist, the method how can reveal his creativity is the most important consideration.
On the other hand, if we want to understand other art work, we should learn about the art. Art work contains a lot of meaning. It includes the generation when it was created and the state of artist. Therefore, we need to study history and artist to understand the artwork.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Mary! You shared a thoughtful perspective on whether everyone should learn to create art, and I like how you distinguished between creating art and understanding it. Your idea that formal art lessons can sometimes limit creativity is interesting and well expressed. You also clearly explained why studying art history and learning about artists can help people better appreciate artworks. To improve your writing, focus on smoother sentence connections, using correct verb forms, and choosing more natural expressions. Overall, your reasoning was strong and your explanation was meaningful, great job!
-Teacher Wela
I don\'t think everyone should learn to create art.
>> I don\'t think everyone needs to learn how to create art.
Learning art gave us basic ability to create art work.
>> Learning art gives us basic skills to create artwork.
However, it make us lock up in fixed rules and distribute showing creativity.
>> However, it can lock us into fixed rules and limit our creativity.
Therefore, if someone want to be artist, the method how can reveal his creativity is the most important consideration.
>> Therefore, if someone wants to become an artist, the most important thing is finding a way to express their creativity.
On the other hand, if we want to understand other art work, we should learn about the art.
>> On the other hand, if we want to understand other artworks, we should study art.
Art work contains a lot of meaning.
>> On the other hand, if we want to understand other artworks, we should study art.
Art work contains a lot of meaning.
>> Artworks contain a lot of meaning.
It includes the generation when it was created and the state of artist.
>> They reflect the time period they were created in and the artist\'s personal situation.
>> They reflect the time period they were created in and the artist\'s personal situation.
Therefore, we need to study history and artist to understand the artwork.
>> Therefore, we need to study history and the artist to fully understand an artwork.
>> Therefore, we need to study history and the artist to fully understand an artwork.
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