Do you think extreme sports are worth the risk? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think it\'s worth to take a risk for enjoying extreme sports.
I like to experience something new and feel thrilled. Extreme sports make it possible.
However, dangerous situations always can happen while you are doing extreme sports.
That\'s why you have to follow the rules and keep safety.
강사 첨삭
Your answer clearly expresses your opinion and balances excitement with safety, which makes your response thoughtful and realistic. I like how you acknowledged both the thrill of extreme sports and the importance of following safety rules. This shows good critical thinking and balanced reasoning. To improve, focus on natural expressions such as \"worth taking the risk\" and \"prioritize safety,\" as well as smoother sentence connections. Overall, your response is concise, logical, and well-structured, great job!
-Teacher Wela
I think it\'s worth to take a risk for enjoying extreme sports.
>> I think it\'s worth taking the risk to enjoy extreme sports.
I like to experience something new and feel thrilled. Extreme sports make it possible.
>> I like experiencing something new and feeling thrilled, and extreme sports make this possible.
However, dangerous situations always can happen while you are doing extreme sports.
>> However, dangerous situations can always happen while you are doing extreme sports.
That\'s why you have to follow the rules and keep safety.
>> That\'s why you have to follow the rules and prioritize safety.
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