Do you think family gatherings are necessary? What do you enjoy about family gatherings?

2023-12-17 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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In order to getting close with family, I think family gatherings are necessary. One of the best ways is go to the family trip. When you go on a family trip, you get closer to your family because you have more time to talk to each other. First of all, our family eats a lot If we go on a trip. We enjoy a hearty table with chicken, ramen and grilled meat. Or If there has a swimming pool at accomodation, We enjoy there. And then, there is a card game in Korea, called \"gostop\", We enjoy with card game with my family.

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In order to getting close with family, I think family gatherings are necessary.
>>> In order to get close with family, I think family gatherings are necessary.  
One of the best ways is go to the family trip.
>>>  One of the best ways is to go on a family trip.
When you go on a family trip, you get closer to your family because you have more time to talk to each other.
>>>   correct
First of all, our family eats a lot if we go on a trip.
>>>  correct  
We enjoy a hearty table with chicken, ramen and grilled meat.
>>>   correct 
Or if there has a swimming pool at accomodation, We enjoy there.
>>> Or if there is a swimming pool at the accommodation, we enjoy it there.   
And then, there is a card game in Korea, called \"gostop\",
>>>  Also, there is a card game in Korea called \"go stop\".
We enjoy with card game with my family.
>>>    We enjoy the card game with my family.

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