Do you think family gatherings are still as important today as they were in the past? Explain your o
학생이 쓴 원문
I used to think family gatherings weren\'t as important today as they were in the past when I was in high school.
I was too busy to attend the gatherings in high school because I was preparing for university entrance exams.
However, I think family gatherings are as important today as they were in the past now, for several reasons.
First of all, they provide us with a chance to maintain bonds and strengthen relationships.
In the past, people lived close to their families and relatives, so they could meet each other often.
However, nowadays people live far apart, so we don\'t have enough time to meet often.
Therefore, family gatherings are important because they give us a chance to reconnect with our loved ones.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
You wrote a very thoughtful and well-structured paragraph! I like how you explained your past opinion and how it changed over time, and you gave clear reasons to support your thoughts. Just watch for small grammar details, like “as important today as they were in the past”. You did a great job overall! Keep writing with this kind of clarity and reflection!
~Teacher Polly
>>CORRECT
I was too busy to attend the gatherings in high school because I was preparing for university entrance exams.
>>CORRECT
OR>>I was too busy to attend them back then because I was preparing for university entrance exams.
However, I think family gatherings are as important today as they were in the past now, for several reasons.
>>However, now I think family gatherings are just as important as they were in the past, for several reasons.
First of all, they provide us with a chance to maintain bonds and strengthen relationships.
>>CORRECT
In the past, people lived close to their families and relatives, so they could meet each other often.
>>CORRECT
However, nowadays people live far apart, so we don\'t have enough time to meet often.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Nowadays, people often live far apart, so we don’t have enough time to meet frequently.
Therefore, family gatherings are important because they give us a chance to reconnect with our loved ones.
>>CORRECT
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