Do you think fashion is important for people\'s lives? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
Each person may think differently one another, but I think fashion is important for me.
I am interested in fashion too but I think fashion makes different emotions to the people.
And also we can express our feelings or our characteristics to other people.
Because of these reasons, for me, fashion is improtant.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
Fashion is sometime a way on how we express ourselves. It\'s sometimes signifies our identity. :)
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Each person may think differently one another, but I think fashion is important for me.
>> CORRECT
I am interested in fashion too but I think fashion makes different emotions to the people.\'
>> I am interested in fashion too but I think fashion affects the emotion of people.
And also we can express our feelings or our characteristics to other people.
>> We can express our feelings and show our characteristics to other people through fashion.
Because of these reasons, for me, fashion is improtant.
>> Because of these reasons, I think fashion is important for me.
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