Do you think gaming can be a good exercise for the brain? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think gaming can be a good exercise for the brain.
1. Puzzle and strategy games improve the ability to solve a problem and think logically.
2. Some games make me memorize complex information or map and help me to judge quickly
3. Because action or FPS games need to handle quickly and exactly, it help my brain activate
4. In a online game, I can get social skills like as a teamwork, communication and cooperation
강사 첨삭
Hello Joey, your answer is excellent because it clearly explains several ways gaming can benefit the brain. I like how you gave specific examples such as puzzle, strategy, and FPS games, and how you explained their effects on problem-solving, memory, and teamwork. This makes your response very strong and well thought out.
I made a few grammar adjustments to make the sentences smoother and more natural. For example, “solve a problem” became “solve problems” to sound more general, “map” was changed to “maps,” and “it help my brain activate” was corrected to “they help activate my brain.” Also, “In a online game” was changed to “In an online game” because “an” is used before a vowel sound.
I truly appreciate how you gave me a long and detailed answer. It shows how well you can organize your thoughts and express them clearly in English. Keep writing like this. It’s an excellent way to strengthen both your grammar and your ability to explain ideas deeply.
~ T. Lia
I think gaming can be a good exercise for the brain.
>> CORRECT
Puzzle and strategy games improve the ability to solve a problem and think logically.
>> Puzzle and strategy games improve the ability to solve problems and think logically.
Some games make me memorize complex information or map and help me to judge quickly
>> Some games make me memorize complex information or maps and help me make quick decisions.
Because action or FPS games need to handle quickly and exactly, it help my brain activate
>> Because action or FPS games need to be handled quickly and accurately, they help activate my brain.
In a online game, I can get social skills like as a teamwork, communication and cooperation
>> In an online game, I can develop social skills such as teamwork, communication, and cooperation.
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