Do you think getting old is a good thing or a bad thing? Explain your answer.
학생이 쓴 원문
getting old is beautiful. it means we be wise, be respectful person when we gets older. some other people think the age is privilege. however, it is totally wrong. when we are getting older, we learnt things such as order, world, life, everything that surround us. thus we learn \"respect\" even whom children, baby. every people have different life, different thoughts. according to the experiences that we had, now we know the life is beautiful and respectful not only my life.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
Yes, we gain more wisdom as we get older. :)
PS: Make sure to capitalize the first letter of the first word in your sentence.
getting old is beautiful.
>> Getting old is beautiful.
it means we be wise, be respectful person when we gets older.
>> It means that we become wiser and respectable when we get older.
some other people think the age is privilege.
>> Some people think that age is a privilege.
however, it is totally wrong.
>> However, it is totally wrong.
when we are getting older, we learnt things such as order, world, life, everything that surround us.
>> When we are getting older, we learn more things about the world, life and things that surrounds us.
thus we learn \"respect\" even whom children, baby.
>> Thus, we should learn how to respect everyone, including the ones that are younger than us.
every people have different life, different thoughts.
>> Every person has different lives and thoughts.
according to the experiences that we had, now we know the life is beautiful and respectful not only my life.
>> According to the experiences that we had, we will know the beauty of life and be respectful towards other people\'s lives as well.
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