Do you think greetings affect first impressions? How?
학생이 쓴 원문
I agree with this sentence, one-hundred percent.
Additionally, I know the fact that the first impression is very imprtant to us.
So, literally, we need to greet people nicely and energitic for remaining our good impression when we meet others.
In real, in my case, I have to say hello loudly, artifitially.
I think it’s related with personal charicteristics, because we are born differently.
My friend feel so hard to say hello on the phone, but she can talk easily to strangers in the real. According to an article, It is called ‘callphobia’.
However, in my case, I feel so hard to say hello first, the situation that I’m not prepare to relate with other people, anywhere.
Even though, I try to get used to this moment. Also I have seen that they are tring to overcome their fears.
And I alway think that “it’s not important how we are fast, if the direction is right.”
It’s okay if we keep going it, although It seems like small changes or less.
강사 첨삭
I agree with this sentence, one-hundred percent.
Additionally, I know the fact that the first impression is very imprtant to us.
>> Additionally, it is a fact that the first impression is very important to us. (formal)
And I alway think that “it’s not important how we are fast, if the direction is right.”
>> I always think that “it’s not important how fast we are, as long as the direction is right.”
>> I agree with this sentence one hundred percent. (no hypen needed)
OR >> I completely agree with this sentence.
Additionally, I know the fact that the first impression is very imprtant to us.
>> Additionally, it is a fact that the first impression is very important to us. (formal)
OR >> Additionally, I know that first impressions are very important to us.
So, literally, we need to greet people nicely and energitic for remaining our good impression when we meet others.
>> So, we need to greet people nicely and energetically to maintain a good impression when we meet them.
>> So, we need to greet people nicely and energetically to maintain a good impression when we meet them.
In real, in my case, I have to say hello loudly, artifitially.
>> In reality, in my case, I have to say hello loudly and artificially.
>> In reality, in my case, I have to say hello loudly and artificially.
OR >> In my case, I have to greet people loudly and in a forced way.
I think it’s related with personal charicteristics, because we are born differently.
>> I think it’s related to personal characteristics because we are born differently.
>> I think it’s related to personal characteristics because we are born differently.
My friend feel so hard to say hello on the phone, but she can talk easily to strangers in the real.
>> My friend finds it very difficult to say hello on the phone, but she can talk easily to strangers in real life.
According to an article, It is called ‘callphobia’.
>> According to an article, it is called “call phobia.”
>> According to an article, it is called “call phobia.”
However, in my case, I feel so hard to say hello first, the situation that I’m not prepare to relate with other people, anywhere.
>> However, in my case, I find it very difficult to say hello first, especially when I’m not prepared to interact with others anywhere.
>> However, in my case, I find it very difficult to say hello first, especially when I’m not prepared to interact with others anywhere.
OR >> I find it challenging to greet first when I’m not ready to interact with others.
Even though, I try to get used to this moment. Also I have seen that they are tring to overcome their fears.
>> Even so, I try to get used to this moment. I have also seen that they are trying to overcome their fears.
OR >> Still, I try to get used to this, and I’ve noticed that others are trying to overcome their fears.
And I alway think that “it’s not important how we are fast, if the direction is right.”
>> I always think that “it’s not important how fast we are, as long as the direction is right.”
OR >> I always believe that speed doesn’t matter as long as the direction is correct.
It’s okay if we keep going it, although It seems like small changes or less.
>> It’s okay if we keep going, even if the changes seem small or insignificant.
OR >> Small changes are okay as long as we keep moving forward.
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