Do you think having a pet is good? Why or why not?

2022-07-26 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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In my opinion, having a pet is good to us for some reasons. First, we spend a lot of time to our pets, and that means that we love them. If we love something, then we are able to grow our abilities related to emotions. Second, we are not lonely. Some people might think that they are too lonely, but if they have a pet, they won\'t. And third, it is a good experience because we can feel a lot of things by taking care of our pets. Because of these reasons, I think having a pet is one of good experiences.

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In my opinion, having a pet is good to us for some reasons.

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First, we spend a lot of time to our pets, and that means that we love them.
>> First, we spend a lot of time with our pets, which shows that we love them.

If we love something, then we are able to grow our abilities related to emotions.

>> If we love something, we will be able to grow emotionally.

Second, we are not lonely.

>> Second, we won\'t be lonely.

Some people might think that they are too lonely, but if they have a pet, they won\'t.

>> Some people might think that they are too lonely, but if they have a pet, they won\'t be anymore.

And third, it is a good experience because we can feel a lot of things by taking care of our pets.

>> Third, it can be a good experience for us to take care of pets.

Because of these reasons, I think having a pet is one of good experiences.

>> Because of these reasons, I think having a pet is one the best experiences.

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