Do you think having a reward system helps you stay motivated? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes. I think having a reward system works well.
You need to spend a lot of time to achieve your goals and it might be hard.
Sometimes, you might lose your motivation.
Having a reward system can give you motivation when you feel lost.
강사 첨삭
Happy Monday! You explained your idea clearly and gave a logical reason why a reward system is effective. I like that you mentioned how it can help when motivation decreases, it makes your answer practical and relatable. To improve, focus on small grammar points and natural word choices, like “stay motivated” instead of repeating motivation. Overall, your reasoning is clear and concise, excellent!
-Teacher Wela
Sometimes, you might lose your motivation.
>> Sometimes, you may lose motivation.
Having a reward system can give you motivation when you feel lost.
>> Having a reward system can help you stay motivated when you feel lost.
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