Do you think having large charity organizations is a good idea? Why or why not?

2019-05-07 · 첨삭 강사 Lainey

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I don’t think so. There was news in Korea a few months ago. A large charity organization has pocketed public money for a long time and the fact was disclosed by a whistle-blower. Many people get mad about it and they terminate support. In my view, the problem occurs because the organization was too huge. When a company is too large than there must be loopholes in the system. Furthermore, the hierarchy makes the atmosphere strict and conservative.

강사 첨삭

Hi Su ^^


I don’t think so. There was news in Korea a few months ago.

>>>  I don\'t think so. There was a news in Korea a few months ago.


 A large charity organization has pocketed public money for a long time and the fact was disclosed by a whistle-blower.

>>> correct


Many people get mad about it and they terminate support.

>>> Many people got mad about it and they terminated their support.


In my view, the problem occurs because the organization was too huge.

>>> In my opinion, the problem occurs because the organization was too huge.


When a company is too large than there must be loopholes in the system.
>>> When the company is too large then there must be some loop holes in the system.


Furthermore, the hierarchy makes the atmosphere strict and conservative.

>>> correct

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