Do you think human beings need to work to be happy? why or why not?
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There are common believes that someone who works what he likes is the happiest person. And many people advise that we should find the work what we like. for these reason they call a job a vocation. Do you agree with that?
One of young colleage asked me a advise for quitting the job. He think it was totally different with what he imagine before he join the company. He expected his job more challenging and meaningful work but he found that his work is boring and repetitive.
I think what made the young person unhappy is the prejudice of people. why a job should not be a way of making money? If he admit a work is a mean of the economical reason, the colleage would not disappointed.
If you are not happy during the work, don\'t worry. There are so many things that can make you happy. After work, you can find the thing make you happy. I recommend you find your \"blue-bird\" outside work.
However, don\'t be misundusand me. I am a very lucky person whith
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There are common believes that someone who works what he likes is the happiest person.
>>>There is a common belief that someone who works what he likes is the happiest person.
And many people advise that we should find the work what we like.
>>>And many people advise us that we should find the work what we like.
for these reason they call a job a vocation.
>>>For this reason, they call it as a vocation.
One of young colleage asked me a advise for quitting the job.
>>>One of my young colleagues asked me an advise on quitting the job.
He think it was totally different with what he imagine before he join the company.
>>>He thought it was totally different with what he imagined before he joined the company.
He expected his job more challenging and meaningful work but he found that his work is boring and repetitive.
>>> He expected that his job is more challenging and meaningful work but he found out that his work was boring and repetitive.
I think what made the young person unhappy is the prejudice of people.
>>>I think what made a young person unhappy is his prejudice.
why a job should not be a way of making money?
>>>Why not a job should be a way of making money?
If he admit a work is a mean of the economical reason, the colleage would not disappointed.
>>>If he admits that a work is a mean of an economical reason, that colleague should not be disappointed.
If you are not happy during the work, don\'t worry. There are so many things that can make you happy.
>>>If you are not happy during working hours, don\'t worry because there are so many things that can make you happy.
After work, you can find the thing make you happy.
>>>After your work, you can find things that make you happy.
I recommend you find your \"blue-bird\" outside work.
>>>I recommend that you find your \"blue-bird\" outside work.
However, don\'t be misundusand me. I am a very lucky person whith
>>>However, don\'t be misunderstand me, I am just a very lucky person.
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