Do you think husbands and wives have different responsibilities according to their gender? Give some
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No, I don’t. I think that people are equal regardless of gender and have same obligations. However, in Korea, generally husbands would go to work and wives would do household chores and take care of child if they have one. Therefore, it seems that we are expecting different things according to sex. For example, Men need to get paid a lot and be in higher position at work in order to support his family. On the contrary, in case of women, they need to take care of their children and do house work alone. In older generations, maybe in our parent’s or grandparent’s generations, it was considered normal. However, I can see a lot of changes in today’s generation. There are a lot of working mothers these days and many fathers who are on his paternity leave and become a full time father. Moreover, many large companies and even governments are encouraging men to take his paternity leave by setting up policies or laws helping to make gender equality society.
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Hi [이름]! It\'s so nice of you to do your homework. I really appreciate the effort and I hope you maintain consistency with your practice!
Good thoughts you have here! Different responsibilities according to gender is another stereotype brought about by the society. It\'s a good thing that things are changing and more and more people have realized the equality of genders.
You have very minimal slips, just be mindful of your subject and verb agreement. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
>>CORRECT
I think that people are equal regardless of gender and have same obligations.
>>CORRECT
However, in Korea, generally husbands would go to work and wives would do household chores and take care of child if they have one.
>>However, in Korea, generally husbands would go to work and wives would do household chores and take care of their child if they have one.
Therefore, it seems that we are expecting different things according to sex.
>>CORRECT (or according to gender sounds preferable)
For example, Men need to get paid a lot and be in higher position at work in order to support his family.
>>CORRECT
On the contrary, in case of women, they need to take care of their children and do house work alone.
>>CORRECT
In older generations, maybe in our parent’s or grandparent’s generations, it was considered normal.
>>CORRECT
However, I can see a lot of changes in today’s generation.
>>CORRECT
There are a lot of working mothers these days and many fathers who are on his paternity leave and become a full time father.
>>There are a lot of working mothers these days while a lot of fathers who are on their paternity leaves have become full time fathers at home.
Moreover, many large companies and even governments are encouraging men to take his paternity leave by setting up policies or laws helping to make gender equality society.
>>Moreover, many large companies and even governments would encourage men to take their paternity leaves by setting up policies or laws that would establish a gender equal society.
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